SEVENTH LESSON: CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH

 Hello bloggers, and welcome to the seventh lesson.

Today we are going to see how to write a concluding paragraph in the right way.

First of all, lest review what a concluding paragraph it's about.

The concluding paragraph is a restatement of the thesis statement, however, you cannot copy and paste all the thesis. You can rewrite the same but with different words such as synonyms. You can end it with a memorial phrase to make the reader reflects. Remember that you can't add new information to it.

Here is an image, in which you also can see how to write it.

Now, let's take a look at the essay example that we have been working on.

                                                                Workaholism Problem (TOPIC)

INTRODUCTION

           Have you ever wondered if you are a workaholic? (CATCHING PHRASE) Although it seems unlikely, this is a problem that has been in society for a long time. Despite it being believed that workaholism is not so grave, it is actually a very serious problem. These days, this condition has increased bringing with it numerous side effects.  Workaholism has caused a lot of consequences(MAIN IDEA) in people, but the most common are problems in their social life, psychological factors, and health disturbances. ( MAIN POINTS are included on the thesis statement)

BODY 

                   Firstly, the workaholic people experience some troubles in their social life. (MAIN POINT 1) Since its time is reduced because these people prefer to work instead of share time with their families or friends. Also, a workaholic can have problems keeping or forming a relationship with any person. (SUPPORTING IDEAS, EXAMPLES) This leads to a second consequence, which is some psychological factors. (MAIN POINT 2) A workaholic can develop depression due to the uncontrollable need for work incessantly. In addition, this need could be developed because these people have debts. (SUPPORTING IDEAS AND EXAMPLES)These conditions lead to a third consequence which is health disturbances. (MAIN POINT 3) Workaholic people will be affected because of the appearance of diseases such as hypertension and high levels of cholesterol. Hypertension is caused by the stress that these people handle. Just as high levels of cholesterol are caused by working long hours. (SUPPORTING IDEAS AND EXAMPLES)

CONCLUSION

To conclude, contrary to popular believes, workaholism has such a negative impact on people’s life having consequences. These consequences are socialization, psychological disorders, and health disturbances. Due to these workaholism effects, people who suffer it could experience social isolation or socializing problems. Because of the social problems, they could experience depression. Also, they could be affected by specific health conditions such as hypertension and high levels of cholesterol. (RESTATEMENT OF THE MAIN POINTS) Some people have to understand that living for working and not working for living is unhealthy, as it can end with someone's life. (Memorable phrase)

As you can see, I summarized the main points differently. If you checked the thesis statement you can see that they are the same but with some other words.

Furthermore, you can see a memorable phrase, but what is it?

A memorable phrase is a phrase in which you can write something to make the reader reflects or question its point of view.

And that would be for today, I hope you learn a lot.